(A Loop Poetry written for OctPoWriMo – Day 9)

I lay dreaming, of a world so beautiful
Beautiful beyond words, surpassing all hopes
Hopes to soar above and beyond
Beyond the darkness, amid the rays
Heartfelt emotions slicing through my feelings
Feelings of despair amid dreams of sanity
Sanity toΒ recover in this practical world
World of humans, deprived of humanity
A tinge of truth gleams somewhere in my thoughts
Thoughts glittered with the fine sequins of cliche
Cliche rules me many a time, my apologies
Apologies for the cliches; and the thoughts I fail to convey
Seems, I, the dreamer, have lost myself again… in reveries
Reveries and melancholic poetry and whimsical music
Music that wanes as I hear Mother, so angry
Angry enough to bring my head back to its senses!!!
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The last word of the line makes the first of next. Beautiful.
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Thank you, Smitaπ
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Welcome π
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I love this!
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Thank you, Jennifer π
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Beautiful Roshni. Often soaking in beautiful reveries we are jolted awake, when reality knocks at our door.
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Thank you, Radhika π€
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“World of humans, deprived of humanity”
This is the truth of the world today.
~cie from poetry of the netherworld~
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Thank you , Cie π
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These powerful words are such a story of creation using heartfelt emotion to imagine another reality. And the last line brought me back to the good old days, finding my mother’s angry comment written across my poem. Great “slice of life” poem.
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Thank you so much Victoria π…I really cherish my childhood days and I’m glad that I was able to write something that could bring you also some good old memories ππ
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Beautifully written, Roshni!
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Thank you, Eugenia π
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You’re welcome!
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Wow itβs very nice to read! Beautiful lines. And I am in love with the last two lines πππΌπvery well penned dear Roshni π
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Thanks dear π The last two lines are part of my story-reality of a younger version of meπ
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I thought so π its come out in a wonderful flow Roshni
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Glad you think soππ
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Perfect piece of writing ππ»
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Thank you, Ishita π
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Always a pleasure! π
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Wow!!! This is so splendid!π«π€ππβ€
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Thank you, my dear friend.β€οΈπ€
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